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Style perspective
From a style perspective, is it appropriate to quote a mission statement from a web page in an article? -- Joi 05:05, 8 Sep 2004 (UTC)
- No, Joi, it is not appropriate. It's also interesting that you'd bring this up, when nearly four years later, your Creative Commons would receive a $500,000 grant from the very same Omidyar Network. Good thing you didn't push too hard to keep Wikipedia free of mission statement puffery in this case. -- Thekohser 16:09, 26 August 2009 (UTC)
ACCESS
Regarding "The Omidyar Network includes ACCESS (reporting on non-profits for philanthropic investors)":
Can Dystopos or anyone else cite a source for that? I don't see any mention of ACCESS (this access?) on the Omidyar Network's site. --164.76.162.246 4 July 2005 10:45 (UTC)
- Here's the page. The name has apparently changed to "Keystone." It doesn't sound like it was related to that access. Dystopos 4 July 2005 14:49 (UTC)
Paraphrase
This article sounds as though it was lifted straight out of a press-release, as opposed to an objective, outside perspective of this organization. 64.2.115.228 (talk) 21:02, 22 September 2008 (UTC)
Likely conflicted editor wrote much of this article
The evidence seems that a very single-minded editor put forth most of the PR puff found in this "encyclopedia" article. It really ought to be fixed, but what are we to do, with an Omidyar partner now sitting on the Wikimedia Foundation board of trustees? -- Thekohser 16:03, 26 August 2009 (UTC)
- And guess who the IP belongs to ... "Omidyar Network Services, LLC NEXTWEB-207-47-3-96-28 (NET-207-47-3-96-1) 207.47.3.96 - 207.47.3.111" -- Seth Finkelstein (talk) 08:05, 30 August 2009 (UTC)
The Same Guidelines Apply to Omidyar as to Any Other Wikipedia Article
Without exception. As written, this currently reads like a PR piece. This is embarrassing to Omidyar, Wikipedia, editors, and readers. Benefac (talk) 15:08, 25 August 2014 (UTC)
Adding Third-Party Footnotes
Hello Wikipedians,
In 2014, Benefac added an “advert” tag to Omidyar Network. In 2018, MarioGom added a “third-party” tag.
Omidyar has hired me to fix these issues in line with Wikipedia’s policies. To that end, I’ve disclosed my COI on the “Talk” pages for both Omidyar and myself, and I’d like to submit a series of suggestions.
Let’s start with the “third-party” tag. As you’ll see, I’ve prepared six requested edits, each of which I’ve paired with an explanation and sources. I’ve tried to organize things clearly and not to overwhelm you with info.
I welcome your thoughts. Thank you kindly for your consideration.
Signed,
BlueRoses13 (talk) 23:51, 2 June 2022 (UTC)
1. Founding
In the lead sentence, the following sentence does not have any footnotes:
Established in 2004 by eBay founder Pierre Omidyar and his wife Pam...
Here are footnotes from third parties:
1. A profile in New York (magazine), “The Pierre Omidyar Insurgency” (2014), confirms that the network was “founded in 2004.”
2. An article in Barron’s (newspaper), “Lessons Learned by the Omidyar Network” (2018), confirms that the network was “set up by eBay founder Pierre Omidyar and his wife Pam.”
3. An article in CNBC, “EBay Founder Pierre Omidyar’s Philanthropic Investment Group Calls for a New Version of Capitalism” (2020), confirms that “Pam co-founded the Omidyar Network.”
Here’s a revised sentence, with the footnotes:
Established in 2004 by eBay founder Pierre Omidyar and his wife Pam...[1][2][3]
2. The "Group" vs. the "Network"
The following sentence appears in the “structure” section:
It is "a Part of the Omidyar Group".[4]
First, here’s a third-party news article that confirms the network is part of the group:
In “Billionaire eBay Founder’s Philanthropy Calls for Re-Imagination of Capitalism” (2020), the Silicon Valley Business Journal confirms that “the 16-year-old Omidyar Network ... is a venture of the Omidyar Group.”
Second, let’s remove the quotation marks. They’re unnecessary.
Third, let’s uncapitalize “part.” That too is unnecessary.
Fourth, any chance we can capitalize “the”? (https://www.omidyargroup.com confirms that “the” is part of the group’s name.)
Here’s a revised sentence:
It is a part of The Omidyar Group.[5]
3. Mike Kubzansky
The following sentence, which appears in the “people” section, is sourced to a self-published website (omidyar.com):
The managing partner of Omidyar Network is Mike Kubzansky, a former partner at Monitor Group (now Monitor Deloitte).[6]
First, here’s a third-party news article for Kubzansky’s current title: In “EBay Founder Pierre Omidyar’s Philanthropic Investment Group Calls for a New Version of Capitalism” (2020), CNBC refers to Kubzansky as the “CEO of the organization.”
Second, neither the current footnote nor the new one mentions Monitor or Deloitte, so should we remove these?
Here’s a revised sentence:
As of 2022, the CEO of Omidyar Network is Mike Kubzansky.[7]
4. Better Than Cash
The following sentence, which appears in the “investees” section, does not have a source:
From 2012, Omidyar Network has been a partner of Better Than Cash Alliance.
Here are two, third-party news articles:
1. In “Philanthropy in Silicon Valley: Big Bets on Big Ideas” (2016), the New York Times reported that “Omidyar participates in the Better Than Cash Alliance, an advocacy group that partners with governments and others to encourage the distribution of money digitally instead of through cash handouts.
2. In “How the Modi Government Wrecked India’s Small Businesses” (2021), Quartz reported that “the Better Than Cash Alliance [is] funded by United States Agency for International Development, Bill and Melinda Gates Foundation, Citi Foundation, Ford Foundation, Mastercard, Omidyar Network and Visa Inc.”
Here’s a revised sentence:
Since 2012, Omidyar Network has been a partner of Better Than Cash Alliance.[8][9]
5. Wikimedia
The following sentence, which appears in the “investees” section, is sourced to a press release, whose link is broken:
In 2009, the Omidyar Network donated $2 million over two years to the Wikimedia Foundation, and at the same time, Matt Halprin of Omidyar Network was appointed to Wikimedia's board of directors.[10]
Here are two better sources (both of them third-party news articles):
1. In “Wikipedia Gets $2M From Omidyar Network” (2009), VentureBeat reported the following: “Omidyar Network just announced that it’s making a $2 million grant to the Wikimedia Foundation … Matt Halprin, a partner at [Omidyar], is also joining Wikimedia’s board of trustees.”
2. In “$2 Million Buys eBay Founder a Wikipedia Seat” (2009), NBC Bay Area reported: “The Omidyar Network, a fund established by eBay billionaire Pierre Omidyar, has pledged $2 million over two years to support the site, and in return landed fund partner Matt Halprin a seat on a shaken-up board of trustees.”
Here’s a revised sentence:
In 2009, the Omidyar Network donated $2 million over two years to the Wikimedia Foundation, and at the same time, Matt Halprin of Omidyar Network was appointed to Wikimedia's board of directors.[11][12]
6. Jeff Alvord
Can we change the following sentence, which appears in the “people” section, from this:
Jeff Alvord is the managing director of The Omidyar Group (TOG).[13]
to this:
As of 2022, Omidyar Network’s board of directors includes five people, including Jeff Alvord[14] and Pat Christen,[15] both of whom are also managing directors of The Omidyar Group.
Why make this change?
1. The current footnote (for Jeff) is broken; I updated it.
2. I added Pat Christen, who has the same job title as Jeff, and I clarified their roles at the group vs. at the network.
- ^ Rice, Andrew (November 2, 2014). "The Pierre Omidyar Insurgency". New York. Retrieved 2 June 2022.
- ^ Schultz, Abby (November 27, 2018). "Lessons Learned by the Omidyar Network". Barron's. Retrieved 2 June 2022.
- ^ Schwartz, Brian (September 14, 2020). "EBay founder Pierre Omidyar's philanthropic investment group calls for a new version of capitalism". CNBC. Retrieved 2 June 2022.
- ^ quoted from lower right of omidyar.com, 2018-07-21.
- ^ Levitsky, Allison (September 14, 2020). "Billionaire eBay founder's philanthropy calls for re-imagination of capitalism". Silicon Valley Business Journal. Retrieved 2 June 2022.
- ^ "Omidyar Network". Retrieved 20 Jul 2018.
- ^ Schwartz, Brian (September 14, 2020). "EBay founder Pierre Omidyar's philanthropic investment group calls for a new version of capitalism". CNBC. Retrieved 2 June 2022.
- ^ Goel, Vindu (November 4, 2016). "Philanthropy in Silicon Valley: Big Bets on Big Ideas". The New York Times. Retrieved 2 June 2022.
- ^ Dharshini, Priya (November 29, 2021). "How the Modi government wrecked India's small businesses". Quartz. Retrieved 2 June 2022.
- ^ "Press releases/Omidyar Network Grant August 2009 - Wikimedia Foundation". wikimediafoundation.org. Retrieved 2016-12-04.
- ^ Ha, Anthony (August 25, 2009). "Wikipedia gets $2M from Omidyar Network". VentureBeat. Retrieved 2 June 2022.
- ^ West, Jackson (August 25, 2009). "$2 Million Buys eBay Founder a Wikipedia Seat". NBC Bay Area. Retrieved 2 June 2022.
- ^ "Jeff Alvord". Omidyar Network. Retrieved 2020-07-01.
- ^ "Jeff Alvord". Omidyar Network. Retrieved 2 June 2022.
- ^ "Pat Christen". Omidyar Network. Retrieved 2 June 2022.