GA Review
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Reviewer: SounderBruce (talk · contribs) 07:31, 3 March 2022 (UTC)
Will take a look at this one in a bit. From a quick readthrough, quite a few sections need to be trimmed (such as the Urban planning and Sport sections) and some citations are missing proper titles. I also see that the nominator has not majorly contributed to the article nor have they sought advice from those who have, which I would suggest in the future. SounderBruce 07:31, 3 March 2022 (UTC)
- Thank you for picking it up. I'm a little puzzled by the suggestion that I've not majorly contributed to the article though - I've made many edits over the last few months (especially last October) making what I'd thought were relatively extensive revisions for accuracy, whilst adding sources to the numerous points previously unsourced. Anyway, I look forward to seeing your thoughts once you've had a chance to look at it. Many thanks. Stortford (talk) 19:53, 3 March 2022 (UTC)
Lead
- Link to the 2011 census article in both the infobox and lead.
- "Garden City" should not be capitalized to maintain consistency.
- "combining the best of town and country living" isn't written in a neutral tone.
- "c." should use {{circa}} for clarity.
- "great influence", "inspired other projects around the world" also need to be toned down.
- The Lenin anecdote does not belong in the lead.
- The lead should summarize some of the modern aspects of the town.
History
Governance
Geography
Sport and leisure
- This section is too long and has too many subsections. I suggest trimming it to only mention teams and organizations that are recognized on a national level or are at least partially professional. The other sections could instead be condensed.
Town twinning
- Is there an independent source available for these entries?
Schools
Wildlife
- The section header should probably not mention the squirrels directly.
- The section needs quite a bit more substance if it's not exclusively about the squirrels.
- I would also suggest moving this under Geography, similar to other city articles.
Roundabouts and Green Belts
- This section should be condensed and folded into a general Transport section. It reads like an essay rather than an encyclopedic entry and needs more substantive sourcing to back its claims.
Electricity generation
Notable residents
- Every entry needs a citation.
- Entries without links should be removed.
- The longer entries should be cut down to simpler descriptions. Mentions of their burial sites, relatives, and home addresses are all unnecessary.
Popular culture
- The list should be converted to prose and cited, preferably with secondary sources like reviews that explicitly mention the connection to Letchworth.
- The table for The World's End is entirely unnecessary and needs to be removed.
Citations
- Book citations should be properly linked, using templates listed at WP:SFN.
- Quite a few citations are missing publisher and date information.
- Heraldry-Wiki is not a reliable source.
Status query
SounderBruce, Stortford, where does this review stand? As far as I can tell, SounderBruce last added to this page back in late March, and Stortford posted here on May 1 about addressing issues raised in that March review. Thank you. BlueMoonset (talk) 15:14, 9 June 2022 (UTC)
- I've not heard anything more since that post on 1 May. Thanks. Stortford (talk) 06:21, 10 June 2022 (UTC)
Second opinion requested in the hopes of finding reviewer to take over
As SounderBruce will not be able to continue the review, the nomination status is being changed to "2nd opinion" in the hopes of finding a new reviewer to take over the review. Thank you to whoever steps up. BlueMoonset (talk) 17:55, 14 June 2022 (UTC)
- Hello! I will be doing this second opinion review :) I will be using the {{GAList2}} template to list any errors in the article. The full review should be up in a few days. ActuallyNeverHappened02 (a place to chalk | a list of stuff i've done) 14:49, 24 June 2022 (UTC)