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I reviewed Draft:User:Sarovaram11/sandbox and declined it. I said that the draft read promotionally, and said to focus on independent reliable sources that had written about the company. I also asked whether its name, and therefore that of the article, should be LabelLife.com or Label Corp?
User: Sarovaram11 then asked for my help: Hi Robert! This is with reference to my article The Label Life, that was rejected (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Sarovaram11/sandbox). I'm attempting to edit it and I wanted to clarify the reasons for rejection so I know I'm on the right track while making the changes. 1) The language - needs to be more neutral and objective (does this mean not using phrases like 'celebrity stylists' and so on) 2) Sources - I've tried to restrict them to articles from magazines and newspapers (Indiatoday, vogue and open, the magazine - among others) could you guide me on what other sources I should be looking for? Apologies if these questions sound silly, it's my first time and I thought it was ready as I put it on the New Contributor's Help chat before submitting for review. But I clearly missed a lot, anyway, it's all a process right? Thanks very much
As to point 1, yes. That is the problem. Phrases such as “The website aims to provide consumers with a celebrity guided shopping experience.[“” are known as peacock language and will result in rejection. (This is hard for many contributors to understand, because these phrases are precisely what one uses in advertising, but advertising is not permitted in Wikipedia.) As to point 2, it now appears that the draft is well sourced. There doesn’t appear (to me) to be a notability issue. There are still serious tone issues.
I have a question for the author. Are you affiliated (as an employee, an agent, or in some other way) with the company? If so, you must make the conflict of interest disclosure, and possibly the paid editing disclosure.
If you have any more questions, we will try to answer them. Robert McClenon (talk) 16:54, 9 April 2016 (UTC)
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