Interstate 470 (Kansas)
I reviewed this article at GAN. In an effort to improve Pzoxicuvybtnrm (talk · contribs)'s writing, I did an in-depth review. I moved that part here in order to get more comments from others who will be watching. –Fredddie™ 02:20, 23 February 2011 (UTC)
Review from Fredddie
- Lead
- The first sentence can be rewritten so it's clear that it's bypassing Topeka's downtown area.
- According to all the maps I've looked at, I-470 goes southeast, not south.
- You've already established how interstates are abbreviated, so spelling out I-335 and abbreviating it is redundant. (Just abbreviate it)
- "I-470 becomes part of the Kansas Turnpike until it reaches its eastern terminus with I-70." Both it and its are ambiguous here.
- The last sentence glosses over the construction of the western end a little too much.
- Route description
- "..which is at that point concurrent with State Highway 4 and US 40.[2]" It's not clear if those two routes are concurrent with I-70 or I-470.
- You use concurrent in two consecutive sentences; use synonyms.
- Do the suburbs have names?
- If two routes are concurrent, they can't possibly meet again. Think of it this way, if you're already sitting next to your friend, you can't meet them – they're already there!
- "I-470, however, continues southeastward until it reaches I-335, which finds its terminus at I-470 at this interchange." This sentences has a couple of issues itself.
- "I-335 is also known as the Kansas Turnpike at this point and I-470, turning abruptly northeast at this point, comprises the next portion of the Kansas Turnpike.[4][5]"
- No part of the Kansas Turnpike, or any toll road, should be called a freeway. Use tollway instead.
- In the last sentence of the RD, "its" is ambiguous again.
To allay Admrboltz's fears below, I am going to rewrite this section. I will do my best to use as much of your work as I can. –Fredddie™ 04:04, 19 February 2011 (UTC)
- The section is out of order. I do like how you talk about the interstates in Topeka as a whole, so let's keep that structure.
- The sentence about the Kansas Turnpike should be first, since it was there first.
- Then talk about the Interstate Highway System's creation and the freeways planned.
- Is there a yellow book map of Topeka? Check Commons.
- Construction of said freeways
- How many years?
- How much did it cost?
- The last paragraph is sloppy. If the first paragraph shapes up with my suggestions, the second could be cleaned up and merged in.
- I mentioned it above, but part of the interstate was named after MLK. This would be a good place to put it.
- Exit list
- Check MOS:RJL for header compliance.
- Do KSDOT and KTA provide official lengths?
- Could the first two exits be combined into one line?
- There has to be a better way to show the toll booth. The bold colspan has to be removed per WP:MOSBOLD