GA Review
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Reviewer: I am the reviewer--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 19:18, 13 October 2010 (UTC)
- I am starting the review.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 05:39, 25 October 2010 (UTC)
Infobox
- Why is the writer William Adams and the producer Will.i.am. Should be consistent.
- As seen in the FA 4 Minutes (Madonna song), in the first infobox mentioning the proper name is first mentioned, followed by their stage name in the second. Candyo32 21:46, 9 November 2010 (UTC)
- You shouldn't copy everything there word for word. While it might be FA, there still are errors. For starters, why is Danja different but not Timbaland? Thats an inconsistency.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 02:13, 10 November 2010 (UTC)
- FA's are supposed to set precedent for other articles, as well as almost every singles GA. I know this is sort of WP:OTHERSTUFF, but when so high quality music articles, (particularly the FA's) it would seem to be something of silent consensus. I assume Timbaland is not because he is included as a featured artist on the song. But the reasoning is much deeper than the surface. While Timbaland may be credited as a writer as "Timbaland," Danja is credited as Nathaniel Hills, as will.i.am. is credited as William Adams. I don't see such as big deal, and almost all HQ music articles on Wikipedia use the proper name writer then common name performer in the writer/producer paramaters such as Poker Face (Lady Gaga song), Tik Tok (song), 3 Words (song), 3 (song), Right Round, Feedback (song), Louboutins, and many many more. Candyo32 13:58, 11 November 2010 (UTC)
- You shouldn't copy everything there word for word. While it might be FA, there still are errors. For starters, why is Danja different but not Timbaland? Thats an inconsistency.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 02:13, 10 November 2010 (UTC)
- As seen in the FA 4 Minutes (Madonna song), in the first infobox mentioning the proper name is first mentioned, followed by their stage name in the second. Candyo32 21:46, 9 November 2010 (UTC)
Lead
- and the third single overall, following the three US singles "Papers," "Hey Daddy (Daddy's Home)," and "Lil Freak." -> wouldn't that make it the fourth?
- Done
- making him the first 2010s artist to collect number-one singles in three consecutive decades, and only the fourth artist of all-time to achieve the feat -> confusing
- Done, took out latter part.
- critically acclaimed? -> I don't see that referenced in the body.
- It was referenced in the body, but now I have added a sentence to start of the reviews in the body.
- The song's choreography and dance-heavy accompanying music video has been compared to that of "Yeah!". -> by who? fans, critics?
- Done
- Usher performed the song live several times, including with will.i.am -> re-write
Composition
- while arranging R&B, hip-hop elements -> R&B and hip-hop
- Done
- all lines feature the auto-tune effect -> you said in the lead several. Needs consistency
Critical reception
- The critics don't say these things. They write them.
- Eh, well articles of featured status like 4 Minutes (Madonna song), Déjà Vu (Beyoncé Knowles song), and others all use a variation of terms such as believed, praised, described, compared, and/or said. Candyo32 21:49, 9 November 2010 (UTC)
- Again, praised and described are fine, but I have a problem with say. The others are fine.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 02:12, 10 November 2010 (UTC)
- Eh, well articles of featured status like 4 Minutes (Madonna song), Déjà Vu (Beyoncé Knowles song), and others all use a variation of terms such as believed, praised, described, compared, and/or said. Candyo32 21:49, 9 November 2010 (UTC)
Chart performance
- number fourteen on in the Billboard Hot 100 -> typo
- Done
- the song lifted -> better word; summited, peaked etc.
- I think lifted may be the better word as it as not a big jump as "summited" would imply, but rather a meager move.
- where does it say anything about honors?
- The section talks about countries where it was certified.
- tied with the Bee Gees, Elton John, and Paul McCartney for the ninth among artists all time with the most Hot 100 hits -> ninth place etc.
- I took out -
theninth among all artist. If "ninth place" makes it seem like this was a race or something.
- I took out -
- "OMG" reached number two in Canada, and was certified Platinum by the -> chart box says 2xP. Which one is right?
- 2P is right Done
- It was certified 2x Platinum by the Australian Recording Industry Association -> chart box says 4. Which one?
- 4P is right Done
Music video
- Usher and will.i.am shot the video the weekend of March 6, 2010, and the video was directed by Anthony Mandler. -> re-write
- Done
Live performances
- and Good Morning America
- Done
- Fix all the also that begin many sentences.
- Done
All In All: Good work, not much too fix.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 06:10, 25 October 2010 (UTC)
- Been two weeks and the issues haven't been fixed. Should this be failed? Wizardman Operation Big Bear 15:12, 9 November 2010 (UTC)
- It is up to the reviewer to decide the alloted time for the review. I am still patient, so you will have to be as well.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 18:33, 9 November 2010 (UTC)
- Its fine, those things are debatable. I'm passing.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 17:51, 11 November 2010 (UTC)