GA Review
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Hi! I will be reviewing this article for GA status, and should have the full review up shortly. Dana boomer (talk) 23:36, 15 October 2009 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose): b (MoS):
- Lead. "In addition, contemporary travellers thought her regime was bigoted and superstitious." What?
- a (prose): b (MoS):
- Birth and baptism. "The least inbred Habsburg ruler for centuries". Could you expand on what is meant by this?
- Done (unlike other Habsburgs who often married their close relatives and had heavily inbred and disabled children such as Charles II of Spain, Maria Theresa's parents were distantly related). Surtsicna (talk) 17:24, 16 October 2009 (UTC)
- Birth and baptism. "Her body was large and immensely strong." "Immensely strong" rings a bit...verbose.
- I'm a little confused about the timeline. In the Heiress presumptive section you say that when Charles VI signed the treaty of 1713, one of the signatory countries made Maria's fiance give up his ancestral dutchy. However, in the Marriage section, you say that the two were not betrothed until 1723. How can he have given up his ancestral dutchy if he wasn't engaged to her (or even expecting to be engaged to her) for another decade?
- Charles VI issued the Pragmatic Sanction in 1713, but France recognized it only after Francis Stephen surrendered Lorraine to the French king's father-in-law. Thus, the sentence belongs to both sections, but I moved the sentence to the following section because it can be a bit confusing. Surtsicna (talk) 17:24, 16 October 2009 (UTC)
- Marriage. "In the summer of 1738, the ongoing Austro-Turkish War took a turn for the worst." It may have been for the worst for Austria, but it was for the best for the Turks. Please reword.
- War of the Austrian Succession. "honouring "the engangements I am under"." Should this be "engagements"?
- War of the Austrian Succession. "negotiating with the Diet." The what?
- War of the Austrian Succession. "A spanner was thrown in the plans" Unencyclopedic language.
- Pregnancies and childbirths. "Four more children were born during the war: Maria Elisabeth, Charles, Maria Amalia, Leopold and Maria Carolina (1748-1748)." Says four children, then names five.
- Jews and Protestants. What made Maria change her views so much with regards to the Jews? It seems an abrupt switch to go from expelling them in 1744 to having a Jewish favourite and issuing protection laws in 1762 to calling them a plague in 1777.
- Maria Theresa never changed her views. Only three years before her death, she wrote that the Jews are the greatest plague and that they should be kept away. Her Jewish courtier only influenced her actions. In the third decade of her reign, due to Theben's influence, Jews were less persecuted but still hated by Maria Theresa. Surtsicna (talk) 17:24, 16 October 2009 (UTC)
- State revenue. "State revenue doubled itself between" Revenue cannot double itself, it must be doubled through the actions of someone. Also, this subsection is really short; is there any way it could be combined with one of the other subsections?
- Church. "Maria Theresa banned the creation of new burial grounds without the prior permission of the government." Why? And why is this law important enough to be mentioned when many of the laws/proclamations she made are not?
- Seven Years War. "She suffered a crushing defeat". Is she referring to Maria Theresa?
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- Ref #2 (Bartleby.com) redirects to the website home page. Once the redirect is fixed, the reference also needs more information - a title, publisher and access date at the very least.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- Ref #85 (Hypothyroidism: the Unsusptected Illness). Is this supposed to be "Unsuspected"?
- I've added one fact tag to a paragraph that needs referencing, in the Religious views and policies section.
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Here are the beginning of my comments. I'm still working on the review, just saving here so that if things crash I don't lose anything :) Will have more up in a bit. Dana boomer (talk) 00:27, 16 October 2009 (UTC)
- Overall, this article is very good. It needs a few minor prose and referencing tweaks, which should be easily remedied. Please let me know if you have any questions! Dana boomer (talk) 01:07, 16 October 2009 (UTC)
- Everything looks good, so I am passing the article to GA status. For the first point in the prose section, I have no idea what I was talking about when I mentioned that - on re-reading, the sentence makes complete sense. Great job with the article, and thanks for the prompt response to my comments. Dana boomer (talk) 17:35, 17 October 2009 (UTC)