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:An image with the same name is in Commons [http://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:USS_Kidd_(DDG-993).jpg], so once the Wikipedia image is deleted, renamed, or transferred [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Files_for_deletion/2009_January_20#USS_Kidd_.28DDG-993.29.jpg to Commons] the Commons file will show. [[User:Cla68|Cla68]] ([[User talk:Cla68|talk]]) |
:An image with the same name is in Commons [http://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:USS_Kidd_(DDG-993).jpg], so once the Wikipedia image is deleted, renamed, or transferred [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Files_for_deletion/2009_January_20#USS_Kidd_.28DDG-993.29.jpg to Commons] the Commons file will show. [[User:Cla68|Cla68]] ([[User talk:Cla68|talk]]) |
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::It looks like this is going to happen on 28 January or so. Waiting with bated breath. :) [[User:Awadewit|Awadewit]] ([[User talk:Awadewit|talk]]) 19:57, 23 January 2009 (UTC) |
::It looks like this is going to happen on 28 January or so. Waiting with bated breath. :) [[User:Awadewit|Awadewit]] ([[User talk:Awadewit|talk]]) 19:57, 23 January 2009 (UTC) |
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:::The new image is now in place [http://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Fred_Moosally&diff=267111920&oldid=266707226]. [[User:Cla68|Cla68]] ([[User talk:Cla68|talk]]) 02:52, 29 January 2009 (UTC) |
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'''Support''' presuming the image issue mentioned above gets cleared up. It was kind of Cla68 to mention my work on the article, but I only did a straightforward copyedit just prior to the nomination, so I think I'm sufficiently uninvolved to register my support. [[User:Maralia|Maralia]] ([[User talk:Maralia|talk]]) 05:30, 23 January 2009 (UTC) |
'''Support''' presuming the image issue mentioned above gets cleared up. It was kind of Cla68 to mention my work on the article, but I only did a straightforward copyedit just prior to the nomination, so I think I'm sufficiently uninvolved to register my support. [[User:Maralia|Maralia]] ([[User talk:Maralia|talk]]) 05:30, 23 January 2009 (UTC) |
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Revision as of 02:52, 29 January 2009
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Respectfully nominate this BLP about the former captain of the United States Navy battleship USS Iowa for FA consideration. The article passed an A-class review with WP:MILHIST. I could not find a birthdate for this article's subject. None of the sources had his birthdate and it wasn't listed in the Birthday Database. Self-nomination with greatly appreciated help from Maralia, ed17, Ched Davis, and Abraham B.S.. Cla68 (talk) 01:03, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
Comments -
If the first section of the references is printed media, why is a website listed first?
- Otherwise, sources look okay, links checked out with the link checker tool. Ealdgyth - Talk 14:14, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
Oppose on criterion 3 File:USS Kidd (DDG-993).jpg - This image is up for deletion. Once this issue is resolved, I will be happy to strike the oppose. Awadewit (talk) 19:46, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
- An image with the same name is in Commons [2], so once the Wikipedia image is deleted, renamed, or transferred to Commons the Commons file will show. Cla68 (talk)
Support presuming the image issue mentioned above gets cleared up. It was kind of Cla68 to mention my work on the article, but I only did a straightforward copyedit just prior to the nomination, so I think I'm sufficiently uninvolved to register my support. Maralia (talk) 05:30, 23 January 2009 (UTC)
- Support
Comments- This is my 40,000th edit, FWIW :) - During his naval career, Moosally served in many different assignments, including as commander of a destroyer and the battleship USS Iowa. - Remove "as".
- I wouldn't mind if the lead was expanded some, just enough so that the first and third paragraphs are equal in size to the second one.
- The paragraphs in the Naval career section are pretty choppy. Is it possible to merge some of the shorter ones?
- At 08:31 on April 19, Iowa prepared to engage in a main gun firing drill as Moosally and Johnson watched from the ship's bridge. - Specify the year.
- The Retirement and media portrayal section feels somewhat like a time-line disguised as prose.
Looks good otherwise. –Juliancolton Tropical Cyclone 21:51, 26 January 2009 (UTC)
- Comments
- "Between September 1988 and January 1989, Iowa conducted little training with her main guns, in part because of ongoing, serious maintenance issues with the main gun turrets."
- Reword? The use of "little" there is slightly confusing.
- "Vogel, Steve (2001-03-18). "Deadly Blast Haunts Battleship's Skipper", Washington Post."
- (In Notes, Printed media) Is it really necessary to link the date? (Though it doesn't show up with the cut&paste I did)
- At 08:31 on April 19, Iowa prepared to engage in a main gun firing drill as Moosally and Johnson watched from the ship's bridge.
- Any way to write this so you don't have to link to 24-hour clock?