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===Initial comments=== |
===Initial comments=== |
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*The grid references in the lead should be removed in compliance per [[WP:LEAD]]. They should be re-located to the infobox? |
*The grid references in the lead should be removed in compliance per [[WP:LEAD]]. They should be re-located to the infobox? |
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:*Done.— [[User:Rodw|Rod]] <sup>[[User talk:Rodw|talk]]</sup> 20:38, 14 June 2015 (UTC) |
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*"near the western end of the Mendip Hills, Somerset, '''notified in 1952'''" - this should be removed from this sentence and re-located into the history part of the lead (where it says "Most of the site is owned by National Trust.."). Also, notified by who? |
*"near the western end of the Mendip Hills, Somerset, '''notified in 1952'''" - this should be removed from this sentence and re-located into the history part of the lead (where it says "Most of the site is owned by National Trust.."). Also, notified by who? |
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:*Done ([[Natural England]]).— [[User:Rodw|Rod]] <sup>[[User talk:Rodw|talk]]</sup> 20:38, 14 June 2015 (UTC) |
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*Should [[Common land]] be capitalised? It isn't in its article |
*Should [[Common land]] be capitalised? It isn't in its article |
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:*now lower case.— [[User:Rodw|Rod]] <sup>[[User talk:Rodw|talk]]</sup> 20:38, 14 June 2015 (UTC) |
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*"At the western end of the hills, closest to the M5 '''motorway is''' Crook Peak" - missing comma |
*"At the western end of the hills, closest to the M5 '''motorway is''' Crook Peak" - missing comma |
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:*Done.— [[User:Rodw|Rod]] <sup>[[User talk:Rodw|talk]]</sup> 20:38, 14 June 2015 (UTC) |
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*"is used by the West Mendip Soaring Association to fly model aircraft in '''south-westerly / southerly or north-easterly''' winds" - what does this mean?? |
*"is used by the West Mendip Soaring Association to fly model aircraft in '''south-westerly / southerly or north-easterly''' winds" - what does this mean?? |
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:*Hopefully now better explained.— [[User:Rodw|Rod]] <sup>[[User talk:Rodw|talk]]</sup> 20:38, 14 June 2015 (UTC) |
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*"'''Some believe''' the name 'Crook'" - I know assertions like these can't be used in GA articles, this should be re-worded. Who believed it? Historians? If so it could be re-worded to {{xt|[Historians/placeholder] believe the name 'Crook'}}? |
*"'''Some believe''' the name 'Crook'" - I know assertions like these can't be used in GA articles, this should be re-worded. Who believed it? Historians? If so it could be re-worded to {{xt|[Historians/placeholder] believe the name 'Crook'}}? |
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:*Its cited to the local parish council, so I have put that.— [[User:Rodw|Rod]] <sup>[[User talk:Rodw|talk]]</sup> 20:38, 14 June 2015 (UTC) |
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*" comes from Old British 'Cruc'" - is this meant to be "Old English"? |
*" comes from Old British 'Cruc'" - is this meant to be "Old English"? |
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:*Changed.— [[User:Rodw|Rod]] <sup>[[User talk:Rodw|talk]]</sup> 20:38, 14 June 2015 (UTC) |
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*"two Neanderthal teeth dated to about 55,000 years BP" - just curious, is BP the same as Before Christ? |
*"two Neanderthal teeth dated to about 55,000 years BP" - just curious, is BP the same as Before Christ? |
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:*Before Common Era (BCE) is the same as Before Christ ( suitable for non christian topics), but BP = [[Before Present]] (used in radiocarbon dating) now wikilinked.— [[User:Rodw|Rod]] <sup>[[User talk:Rodw|talk]]</sup> 20:38, 14 June 2015 (UTC) |
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*The Barton Camp section is lacking on information, what type of camp is it? Military? Disused? If possible, it would be great if you could flesh this out |
*The Barton Camp section is lacking on information, what type of camp is it? Military? Disused? If possible, it would be great if you could flesh this out |
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:*I've added a little more from [http://www.bartoncamp.co.uk/ their web site] but as courses and activities vary I',m not sure what else to add.— [[User:Rodw|Rod]] <sup>[[User talk:Rodw|talk]]</sup> 20:38, 14 June 2015 (UTC) |
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Revision as of 20:38, 14 June 2015
GA Review
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 19:18, 14 June 2015 (UTC)
I'll have this done by tomorrow JAGUAR 19:18, 14 June 2015 (UTC)
Initial comments
- The grid references in the lead should be removed in compliance per WP:LEAD. They should be re-located to the infobox?
- "near the western end of the Mendip Hills, Somerset, notified in 1952" - this should be removed from this sentence and re-located into the history part of the lead (where it says "Most of the site is owned by National Trust.."). Also, notified by who?
- Done (Natural England).— Rod talk 20:38, 14 June 2015 (UTC)
- Should Common land be capitalised? It isn't in its article
- "At the western end of the hills, closest to the M5 motorway is Crook Peak" - missing comma
- "is used by the West Mendip Soaring Association to fly model aircraft in south-westerly / southerly or north-easterly winds" - what does this mean??
- "Some believe the name 'Crook'" - I know assertions like these can't be used in GA articles, this should be re-worded. Who believed it? Historians? If so it could be re-worded to [Historians/placeholder] believe the name 'Crook'?
- " comes from Old British 'Cruc'" - is this meant to be "Old English"?
- "two Neanderthal teeth dated to about 55,000 years BP" - just curious, is BP the same as Before Christ?
- Before Common Era (BCE) is the same as Before Christ ( suitable for non christian topics), but BP = Before Present (used in radiocarbon dating) now wikilinked.— Rod talk 20:38, 14 June 2015 (UTC)
- The Barton Camp section is lacking on information, what type of camp is it? Military? Disused? If possible, it would be great if you could flesh this out
- I've added a little more from their web site but as courses and activities vary I',m not sure what else to add.— Rod talk 20:38, 14 June 2015 (UTC)
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On hold
There are some prose and organisational issues that prevent this from meeting the GA criteria at the moment, but I'm confident that once they're all addressed then this would stand a good chance of passing. I hate to let well-researched articles go, unlike some reviewers! JAGUAR 19:32, 14 June 2015 (UTC)