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== Feedback from 5C PZ ==
* Detail which indigenous peoples are affected.
--> Brief background on the Sami and Inuit groups:
http://www.un.org/en/events/indigenousday/pdf/Indigenous_Arctic_Eng.pdf
https://www.sametinget.se/sametinget
http://dx.doi.org/10.1080/13621025.2010.506709
--> Summarize in greater depth the opposing indigenous views:
Guardian: https://www.theguardian.com/environment/2011/jul/04/arctic-resources-indigenous-communities
Sami / Inuit comparison: http://journals.sagepub.com/doi/pdf/10.1177/0967010616665957
Background research on the many different indigenous people in the Arctic and their connection to their land + how climate change can effect their livelihoods:
http://www.arcticcentre.org/EN/communications/arcticregion/Arctic-Indigenous-Peoples
* More resources on Norway:
On the gas industry: https://www.regjeringen.no/en/topics/energy/oil-and-gas/id1003/
European energy security: The future of Norwegian natural gas production: http://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S0301421509005096
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Feedback from Garrison
• Excellent job so far! Very coherent structure, neutral writing style, and comprehensive content. Good job with linking and citations. I like the map you have provided and think the article could benefit from more visual content.
• Additional editing needed for grammatical errors, such as extra comma in “Greenland Sea, Barents, Sea, Kara Sea…” and in “Another plentiful resource is the arctic is located underwater; fish” should be a colon, not a semicolon.
• I would be interested in learning more about how China and other nations are trying to get involved, add more info here if you can.
• The Climate Refugees section needs some work, there are no citations and it needs to be copy edited.
• Please add categories to your article.
• Good job linking to other articles but try to add more links to from other articles to yours. — Preceding unsigned comment added by California1990 (talk • contribs) 01:44, 3 April 2017 (UTC)
Feedback from Prof. Gelobter
Really nicely structured and documented. Remember however that your grade depends also on the extent to which you cover EJ in the article. I think you can accomplish this by focusing more on arctic communities and the impacts of the race and of global warming on them. A lot more needs to be done in this direction. Have you reached out to stakeholders?
--EJustice (talk) 07:35, 10 April 2017 (UTC)
Feedback from 5C PZ
- Detail which indigenous peoples are affected.
--> Brief background on the Sami and Inuit groups: http://www.un.org/en/events/indigenousday/pdf/Indigenous_Arctic_Eng.pdf https://www.sametinget.se/sametinget http://dx.doi.org/10.1080/13621025.2010.506709
--> Summarize in greater depth the opposing indigenous views: Guardian: https://www.theguardian.com/environment/2011/jul/04/arctic-resources-indigenous-communities Sami / Inuit comparison: http://journals.sagepub.com/doi/pdf/10.1177/0967010616665957 Background research on the many different indigenous people in the Arctic and their connection to their land + how climate change can effect their livelihoods: http://www.arcticcentre.org/EN/communications/arcticregion/Arctic-Indigenous-Peoples
- More resources on Norway:
On the gas industry: https://www.regjeringen.no/en/topics/energy/oil-and-gas/id1003/ European energy security: The future of Norwegian natural gas production: http://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S0301421509005096