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I am going to stop there for the moment. If there are widespread copyright issues with the article they need to be addressed. They may be nothing to do with your involvement with the article. [[User:Cwmhiraeth|Cwmhiraeth]] ([[User talk:Cwmhiraeth|talk]]) 06:03, 1 July 2014 (UTC) |
I am going to stop there for the moment. If there are widespread copyright issues with the article they need to be addressed. They may be nothing to do with your involvement with the article. [[User:Cwmhiraeth|Cwmhiraeth]] ([[User talk:Cwmhiraeth|talk]]) 06:03, 1 July 2014 (UTC) |
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:I don't know if I can comment here, apologies and please move it to an appropriate place if needed. But: |
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::{{tq|It should not need to contain inline citations}} - Please, please, please, even if it does not ''need'' it, please keep inline citations in the lead, even if such citations are repeated in the main text below. As a Wikipedia <u>reader</u>, it is quite annoying to have to look down (sometimes very much down) in the middle of text to find the source of a fact in the lead. Inline citations never hurt and are actually recommended to preserve text-source integrity (see [[WP:CITEFOOT]], [[WP:INTEGRITY]]).--[[User:Cyclopia|<font size="2" color="seagreen">cyclopia</font>]][[User talk:Cyclopia|<font color="red"><sup>speak!</sup></font>]] 16:18, 2 July 2014 (UTC) |
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Reviewer: Cwmhiraeth (talk · contribs) 18:27, 29 June 2014 (UTC)
- I propose to review this article and will be starting my review within the next few days. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:27, 29 June 2014 (UTC)
First reading
In general this article is well written and organized.
- The caption to the taxobox image needs attention.
- The opening sentences of the lead could be a bit more explanatory. Is this a marine or a freshwater fish? Is it a bony or a cartilaginous fish? Where is it found? What is its size? The word "euryhaline" is wikilinked but the reader should not need to click through to understand its significance. The "superorder Holostei" is mentioned but does not appear in the taxobox.
- You need to think whether you are going to use the singular or the plural when describing the fish. For example these sentences go from one to the other: "Its common name was derived from its resemblance to the American alligator, particularly its broad snout and long sharp teeth. Their body ... "
- The lead section should be a summary of the information in the body of the text. It should not need to contain inline citations because the referencing should be present in the main text. At the moment there are several topics in the lead section that are not mentioned elsewhere.
- The sentence about gars being primitive fishes could go in an "Taxonomy and evolution" section.
- The present Taxonomy section contains scientific names that should be italicized.
- There is a general scarcity of wikilinking.
- The Anatomy and physiology section could do with more of a description of the fish, its colouring, shape, fins etc.
- The article contains close paraphrasing and copyright infringements. For example, the article states " ... are commonly found in the warm, sluggish backwaters of lowland rivers and lakes, in swamps, reservoirs, brackish waters, bayous and bays in the Southern United States." and the source states " They are commonly found in the warm, sluggish backwaters of lowland rivers and lakes, in swamps, reservoirs, brackish waters, bayous and bays."
- The tool "Duplicate detector" is not working at the moment so it is not easy for me to check for generalised copyright issues.
I am going to stop there for the moment. If there are widespread copyright issues with the article they need to be addressed. They may be nothing to do with your involvement with the article. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:03, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
- I don't know if I can comment here, apologies and please move it to an appropriate place if needed. But:
It should not need to contain inline citations
- Please, please, please, even if it does not need it, please keep inline citations in the lead, even if such citations are repeated in the main text below. As a Wikipedia reader, it is quite annoying to have to look down (sometimes very much down) in the middle of text to find the source of a fact in the lead. Inline citations never hurt and are actually recommended to preserve text-source integrity (see WP:CITEFOOT, WP:INTEGRITY).--cyclopiaspeak! 16:18, 2 July 2014 (UTC)