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- This review is transcluded from Talk:Yuuyami Doori Tankentai/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: TheJoebro64 (talk · contribs) 22:14, 3 October 2018 (UTC)
This one looks like it's been gathering dust. Doing it JOEBRO64 22:14, 3 October 2018 (UTC)
Comments:
- It... follows a comparable story of Japanese youth exploring paranormal urban legends in their neighborhood. This doesn't really make sense to me—how is it comparable? Also this isn't mentioned in prose.
- I just removed the word cuz it's not really needed. What I mean is, the story about Japanese youth exploring rumors in their neighborhood is comparable to the narratives in Twilight Syndrome.
- first collecting rumors at the school and then later investigating them in city. Typo—should be "in the city."
- Done
- IIRC the use of "very" is discouraged, as it's unneeded to express the point (horror was popular and horror games were popular)
- Done
- ... including some involved with Twilight Syndrome, and decided to develop another horror game borrowing the former series' gameplay system. I don't think "former" is needed here—there's no other series it could be referring to.
- Done
- Upon release, Famitsu scored it at 26/40. ...and that's it? I feel like you should explain Famitsu's thoughts about the game; looking at the source they're present.
- I added more. It's too bad Famitsu doesn't post the full reviews.
Just a few issues, otherwise this is a great little read. JOEBRO64 11:43, 5 October 2018 (UTC)
- @TheJoebro64: TarkusABtalk 00:50, 6 October 2018 (UTC)