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* {{tq|Announced in January, and held during two consecutive nights in April 2000 at the Araneta Coliseum in Quezon City, the concerts were part of Velasquez's campaign in support of her tenth studio album R2K (1999).}} Looking at the concert synopsis, was it just the same concert being performed twice? The subject seems to be about one concert rather an actual series. —[[User:Tenryuu|<span style="color:#556B2F">Tenryuu 🐲</span>]] ( [[User talk:Tenryuu|💬]] • [[Special:Contributions/Tenryuu|📝]] ) 19:49, 7 June 2022 (UTC) |
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* {{tq|[T]he concerts were her first performance in a large-scale indoor arena production.}} Similar to above. Should this be treated in the singular? —[[User:Tenryuu|<span style="color:#556B2F">Tenryuu 🐲</span>]] ( [[User talk:Tenryuu|💬]] • [[Special:Contributions/Tenryuu|📝]] ) 19:49, 7 June 2022 (UTC) |
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* {{tq|Velasquez commissioned Rajo Laurel [...]}} Wikilink removed. {{gray|Not a copyediting issue, but the subject doesn't appear at the page provided.}} —[[User:Tenryuu|<span style="color:#556B2F">Tenryuu 🐲</span>]] ( [[User talk:Tenryuu|💬]] • [[Special:Contributions/Tenryuu|📝]] ) 19:49, 7 June 2022 (UTC) |
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* Concert synopsis: This seems ''too'' detailed, especially with all the costume changes. Unless there's something notable about costume pieces, I think those can be omitted. —[[User:Tenryuu|<span style="color:#556B2F">Tenryuu 🐲</span>]] ( [[User talk:Tenryuu|💬]] • [[Special:Contributions/Tenryuu|📝]] ) 19:49, 7 June 2022 (UTC) |
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* {{tq|''In retrospect'', Elvin Luciano from CNN Philippines called it "the most iconic image" of the singer, while Lo termed it a "decidedly daring or risky action".}} Emphasis added, wikilink removed. I'm not sure the emphasised phrase is being used correctly; what are you trying to convey by saying ''in retrospect''? It means ''to look backwards (at a past event)''. —[[User:Tenryuu|<span style="color:#556B2F">Tenryuu 🐲</span>]] ( [[User talk:Tenryuu|💬]] • [[Special:Contributions/Tenryuu|📝]] ) 19:49, 7 June 2022 (UTC) |
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*{{tq|Cited by a foreign magazine as one of the best shows in Asia in the last 25 years [...]}} This is closely paraphrased from the synopsis of the source video. Which magazine? As it is it comes off as promotional. —[[User:Tenryuu|<span style="color:#556B2F">Tenryuu 🐲</span>]] ( [[User talk:Tenryuu|💬]] • [[Special:Contributions/Tenryuu|📝]] ) 19:49, 7 June 2022 (UTC) |
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Looking forward to your answers. —[[User:Tenryuu|<span style="color:#556B2F">Tenryuu 🐲</span>]] ( [[User talk:Tenryuu|💬]] • [[Special:Contributions/Tenryuu|📝]] ) 19:49, 7 June 2022 (UTC) |
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Did you know nomination
- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by SL93 (talk) 13:52, 19 June 2022 (UTC)
... that Regine Velasquez's aerial performance (pictured) during R2K: The Concert was inspired by the opening segment of Paula Abdul's Under My Spell Tour, which she saw at the Folk Arts Theater in Manila?Source: February 19, 2019. " Regine Velasquez-Alcasid looks back on her R2K concert".'Jeepney TV interview (in Tagalog) – via YouTube. 00:05 minutes in. Translation "I saw Paula Abdul’s concert and she was flying [with wires], it was at the Folk Arts Theater, and I was so impressed, so I told myself, I’ll do that too"; Long, Ernie. (August 2, 1992). Paula Abdul's show, short but spellbinding. "She began the event singing the title song to her recent hit album "Spellbound" by being pulled from beneath the stage to the top of the stage by wires"
Created by Pseud 14 (talk). Self-nominated at 17:56, 15 May 2022 (UTC).
- The article is new enough, has no unsourced claims or any issues otherwise, AGF about the Tagalog source and video. I do think the hook could be shorter so I would suggest ALT1.--NØ 10:07, 6 June 2022 (UTC)
ALT1: ... that Regine Velasquez's aerial performance (pictured) during R2K: The Concert was inspired by the opening segment of Paula Abdul's Under My Spell Tour?
Source: February 19, 2019. " Regine Velasquez-Alcasid looks back on her R2K concert".'Jeepney TV interview (in Tagalog) – via YouTube. 00:05 minutes in. Translation "I saw Paula Abdul’s concert and she was flying [with wires], it was at the Folk Arts Theater, and I was so impressed, so I told myself, I’ll do that too"; Long, Ernie. (August 2, 1992). Paula Abdul's show, short but spellbinding. "She began the event singing the title song to her recent hit album "Spellbound" by being pulled from beneath the stage to the top of the stage by wires"
- Suggesting an ALT for @Pseud14 and MaranoFan :) theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (she/they) 09:37, 15 June 2022 (UTC)
- ALT2: ... that during R2K: The Concert, Regine Velasquez was lifted by wires (pictured) as if she were flying towards the audience?
- Bad ping to Pseud 14 theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (she/they) 09:38, 15 June 2022 (UTC)
- Works for me @Theleekycauldron and MaranoFan: Thanks. Pseud 14 (talk) 12:54, 15 June 2022 (UTC)
I'm doing a re-review to let preppers know if this article is ready to be promoted:
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Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation |
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Image: Image is freely licensed, used in the article, and clear at 100px. |
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QPQ: Done. |
Overall: ALT2 approved Z1720 (talk) 15:19, 18 June 2022 (UTC)
Copyedit request
Hey Pseud 14, doing my thing as usual here:
Announced in January, and held during two consecutive nights in April 2000 at the Araneta Coliseum in Quezon City, the concerts were part of Velasquez's campaign in support of her tenth studio album R2K (1999).
Looking at the concert synopsis, was it just the same concert being performed twice? The subject seems to be about one concert rather an actual series. —Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 19:49, 7 June 2022 (UTC)[T]he concerts were her first performance in a large-scale indoor arena production.
Similar to above. Should this be treated in the singular? —Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 19:49, 7 June 2022 (UTC)Velasquez commissioned Rajo Laurel [...]
Wikilink removed. Not a copyediting issue, but the subject doesn't appear at the page provided. —Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 19:49, 7 June 2022 (UTC)- Concert synopsis: This seems too detailed, especially with all the costume changes. Unless there's something notable about costume pieces, I think those can be omitted. —Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 19:49, 7 June 2022 (UTC)
In retrospect, Elvin Luciano from CNN Philippines called it "the most iconic image" of the singer, while Lo termed it a "decidedly daring or risky action".
Emphasis added, wikilink removed. I'm not sure the emphasised phrase is being used correctly; what are you trying to convey by saying in retrospect? It means to look backwards (at a past event). —Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 19:49, 7 June 2022 (UTC)Cited by a foreign magazine as one of the best shows in Asia in the last 25 years [...]
This is closely paraphrased from the synopsis of the source video. Which magazine? As it is it comes off as promotional. —Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 19:49, 7 June 2022 (UTC)
Looking forward to your answers. —Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 19:49, 7 June 2022 (UTC)