Hurricane Heather
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I've listed this article for peer review because it's the first article I wrote mostly fully, and I would like suggestions on how to improve it.
Thanks, Skarmory (talk • contribs) 00:57, 10 January 2021 (UTC)
- Lede
- 1st sentence: describe what the storm is, not what it caused.
- "eighth named storm" is confusing language.
- "inactive" season? is that necessary?
- "Heather became a hurricane" -> "the Tropical storm was again upgraded to a hurricane" or something like that. "Heather became a hurricane" sounds goofy.
- Meteorological history looks good, but it does retread some stuff that was already in the lede.
- Effects
"The then-governor of Arizona" has a clunky link, and it rolls off the tongue very poorly. It could be changed, but it doesn't have to be.
- Changed wording to "The governor of Arizona at the time". Skarmory (talk • contribs) 19:35, 7 February 2021 (UTC)
Also, "Nogales" might be over-linked.
- Removed the link in the met history section, along with a couple other things which were overlinked. Skarmory (talk • contribs) 19:35, 7 February 2021 (UTC)
Hope this helped, @Skarmory!